This is the first account of the Ewells, with Burris at school:
Below is an annotated response to the question, based on the pages above:
"How does Lee use details in this passage to present the Ewell family to the reader?"
The reason why this response is good is because it directly answers the question, using both language and contextual analysis to do so.
To get into Band 6 (which is the top band in your exam), you need to:
- Use accurate spelling, grammar and punctuation
- Refer to language and context in your response and explain why it's used
- Pick the best quotations
- Analyse the quotations IN DEPTH
- Explore a range of detail (so not just one quote per answer)
Here is a couple of examples of the above essay re-written into an A answer. Further analysis is given or a different, more apt quote chosen.
TASK: Complete the essay question: "In the novel as a whole, how does Lee present the Ewell family?"
Below are two responses to the above question. One in annotated and one isn't. Can you identify the elements of the top one to justify why it's an 'A' response?
For this question, you are expected to refer to another event where the Ewells are depicted and explain and explore that presentation.
The Ewells are described and mentioned and referred to throughout the book. Lee always presents the Ewells as a whole as negative. However, there are certain characters that are not presented as negatively. Mayella Ewell, for instance is presneted as a mis-guided, misjudged member of the Ewell family. Lee does this through little details throughout the text, by referring to her flowers in the dirty garden as "bewildering Maycomb." This is because these flowers are juxtaposed against the garden, which also emphasises her difference to the rest of her family.
Here are some essays that fully explain Mayella's presentation as a metaphorical mockingbird.
However, as stated previously, most Ewell descriptions tend to be negative. This is shown when Uncle Jack and Atticus are talking about the case, and they're mentioned briefly, but the comment is one of negativity.
The Ewell description doesn't change throughout the text. It continues to be presented as negative (see the trial section). Even after Bob Ewell won the trial and got his way, he continues to haunt and taunt Atticus. Why do you think Bob Ewell despises Atticus so much, even after he won?
Does anyone know what the second comment on the right in the fourth picture says?
ReplyDeleteDo you mean on the essay? It says "basic second quote, not thoroughly analyse, but there to provide further detail"
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
ReplyDeleteOn the essay that we have to re-write, I'm confused where to add in the other event. Would it be in the first or second paragraph?
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure what you mean by this Charlotte? The essay you re-write is based on the pages above it only (the first time the Ewells are introduced trough Burris). So not sure where you'd add another event or what even you'd refer to? The essay needs to be re/written because it's only about a B+ answer, how would you make it an A from the criteria above the essay? Also, I only put in positive comments to not make your job easy... Sorry.
ReplyDeleteThe question below the essay is another mini-essay question you must answer from scratch referring to any passage in the novel, but you can use the ones I've put up to help you. You only refer to one other event and talk about context and language in that event.
Hope this helps, but if you're still confused, please be more specific with your confusion.
I now see: I thought the task underneath the essay was for the essay we had to re-write and not for the mini-essay. Thank you :)
ReplyDeleteFor the essay about Mayella's flowers presenting her as a metaphorical mockingbird, what would the context comment be? I can't find one from that section of the text.
ReplyDeleteYou need to think about the Ewells in general here and how that type of person would have been perceived in Maycomb, discussing the idea of stereotypes and how Mayella goes against the Ewells stereotype in Maycomb
ReplyDeleteOk thanks. That makes more sense :-)
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ReplyDelete(I know this is quite late) but I was just checking through my work, and what we had to do was the mini-essay response on this page, and the other two listed on the 'Holiday Homework' document? and I've realised I didn't rewrite the essay response question on the website, I'm not sure which question on this website we had to rewrite.
The response is the fourth document on this page. I also put it up on showmyhomework in order for you to just edit it on your computer, instead of rewriting it. As stated above, it's about a B+ response. Your job is to turn it into an 'A', based on the criteria above the document on this page. You are to only refer to the passage above the essay, pages 32-36, which I have annotated for you and you also annotated in class last term.
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